Tyler Koford – “Locus Amoneus” Movie Script

My presentation video:

For my senior project, I took on writing a feature-length script.

The script is about a disgruntled artist who is convinced to steal a piece of modern art but gets tracked down by the artist himself as she and her cohorts try to sell it off.

Screenplay writing is something I am very interested in pursuing as a career choice, so I figured this senior project was the perfect place to get started.

In order to finish the script, I tasked myself with writing a minimum of four pages a day, which I kept to very faithfully. I ended up writing 68 pages, which translates to 68 minutes of screen time, a bit shy of a feature length, and I wanted to see what I needed to do to make it longer and better. With it done, I sent it to Janine Gilbert, a professional screenplay writer who teaches here at the university, and Brian Faye, a producer at LDS Motion Picture Studios. They both gave me helpful feedback on my script, such as dialogue changes, plot fixes, and suggestions on scenes I could add to strengthen the story.

For example, there are some major character changes I want to do. Currently, the characters Meave and Alma have very similar goals and motivations. They are too similar and not very strong to begin with. I am considering changing Alma to be a much older gentleman with an older grudge of some sort. Also, the antagonist, Taylor, has no good reason to pursue the thieves without law assistance. He needs better motivation or a different plot element that would warrant him not wanting the police on his side. Changing those things would drastically change much of the script’s content and especially the ending, which is also fairly underdeveloped.

I was hoping to make a marketable script with this project, but I learned that if I want to do that I need to do way more research and studying. Going forward, I want to re-work a lot of the plot and even change the nature of several characters, which will require a lot more re-writes. Thanks to my discussions with the professionals, I now know more about the industry and how I can improve my screenwriting process going forward.